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Flowing time
can’t stop time

Flowing time
pass too fast

Flowing time
can’t come back

Flowing time
caught me here

Flowing time
won’t stop this time.
short poem
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:iconrebelfemme:
rebelfemme Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2005
Yes, short and sweet, as others have so aptly noticed. Good call on first line repetition to emphasise inner meaning.
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanko so much :hug:
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:iconm-o-d:
M-O-D Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005
Good job of difening time, I really like it :hug:
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, sweeite :glomp:
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:icongoodgirlie:
goodgirlie Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
Short n sweet.......n so true!
Nice poem!=)
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanko...
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:icongoodgirlie:
goodgirlie Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
anytime,gal!=)
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:iconthy-ilia:
thy-ilia Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005
i found another meaning.=]
times flowing. but so should you =] life is a continouse epic. not a sequance of events .
you should cherish the former
and view youre broblems like the later =]
bye bye now


ps. i wish i had an audiance as big as youre =D but hey. i got 24 view on one poems. and im thrilled.. thats 24 ppl i elightened. or made them think =]
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks alot... I will come and look at you poems, so you will get one more pageviwer.. :D
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:iconthy-ilia:
thy-ilia Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005
comment too .. it doesnt hurt =D
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:iconthy-ilia:
thy-ilia Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005
lolz =]
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Darkangel-Drusilla Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Student
short and sweet ... brilliant :hug:
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanko :glomp:
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Darkangel-Drusilla Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2005  Student
sok :!: :glomp:
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:iconfalyra:
Falyra Featured By Owner May 31, 2005   Writer
too true...
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, hun
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:icondeathtrance:
deathtrance Featured By Owner May 31, 2005
Its really nice...so true! :)
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 31, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp: thanks you so very much
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:icondeathtrance:
deathtrance Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2005
anytime!! :glomp:
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locke88 Featured By Owner May 31, 2005
short but meaningful......
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 31, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :hug:
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wilddamon Featured By Owner May 31, 2005
Neat! I like the shortness, and it feels very true... Just one thing: "pass to fast" doesn't quite make sense. Maybe "passed too fast" would clear it up. But maybe all it needs is the extra "o" on "too". Anyway, great writing! :D :D
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TigerEyes04 Featured By Owner May 30, 2005   Writer
Not bad at all :D I like it
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 31, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :glomp:
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:iconkrow-lost-and-found:
Krow-Lost-and-Found Featured By Owner May 30, 2005   Writer
i like the story in the poe, and the shortnessmakes it more impacted. nice work :hug:
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 31, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :glomp:
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:iconjl-miller:
JL-Miller Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
It makes sense...
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 31, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks ^^
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shadowedfire Featured By Owner May 30, 2005
I like it, making it short aids in it's wonderfulness
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanko so much :glomp:
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:icondaicaro:
Daicaro Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Photographer
It's short and sweet. I like it. I agree with Kage, the smaller it is the more effect it has.
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanko :glomp:
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:iconkage-chan:
kage-chan Featured By Owner May 30, 2005
Nice! I think this has even more impact because of its short structure, it hit you and it stick to your brain. Good job! ^^
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanko :hug:
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MauvaisSang Featured By Owner May 30, 2005
Good...
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks
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MauvaisSang Featured By Owner May 30, 2005
:kiss:... :hug:...
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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Katie-Bach Featured By Owner May 30, 2005
Short and spectacular!
I love it!
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:iconxetha:
xetha Featured By Owner May 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :hug:
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